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Overkill

This is a story about old news.

David Riehm, who was seventeen and a high-school student when all this started, wrote a story about a guy who wakes from a wet dream, proceeds to accidentally sodomize himself with his little brother’s Fischer-Price toy (good detail!) and then gets his head run over by the school bus.

(Does this sound familiar to anyone? It could be a South Park episode.)

His teacher was not happy with his choice of subject matter: “David, I am offended by this piece. If this needs to be your subject matter, you’re going to have to find another teacher. I’m actually a little concerned about your obsessive focus on sex and potty language. Make a change — today!”

He retaliated–not merely by upping the ante on the violence and obscenity, but by changing its focus. He wrote a point/counterpoint essay as a discussion between a creative, misunderstood high-school student named “Tad Warner” and his mean, narrow-minded, puritanical, stupid, jealous teacher, “Mrs. Cuntchesen” (see what he did there?). She commented on that essay, too: “Wow, David. You’ve taken this really personally. Maybe we need to sit down together to talk this through when we have lots of time.”

Apparently, Riehm did have a discussion with his teacher, and she felt that he was willing to modify his language and subject matter a little bit. For a few months afterwards, he wrote stories that she considered appropriate. However, for his final portfolio, David wrote a story called, “Bowling for Cuntchesen,” about a creative, misunderstood high school student who guns down his mean, narrow-minded, puritanical, stupid, jealous teacher. He describes her death in graphic language: “I winced at the shot, but she winced more as the bullet replaced her left eye. In an instant a red mist was produced from the wound, followed by a stead [sic] flow of blood, tissue, and bone fragments. I felt the warm mist speckle onto my face.” Then he describes turning the gun on himself and feeling “at peace.” The end of the story reveals it all to have been just a dream; maybe Riehm thought that would soften the rest of the story. The story contains some misogynist language. He refers to her as “that bitch,” and talks about her stepping “out of line,” and “out of her place.” The story fluctuates between petulance–“Screw her”–and rage.

His teacher felt anxious enough to alert the authorities–not just school authorities, but law enforcement. She explains why in her statement.

Then it gets a little weird:

David was suspended on Jan. 24, 2005. The next night, three men — a Cook County deputy sheriff, a state trooper and a social worker — showed up at Colleen Riehm’s home on the Grand Portage Indian Reservation with a court order to seize her son and commit him to a psychiatric ward 150 miles away in Duluth.

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David was ordered released from the hospital 72 hours after he had been taken into custody. His mother received $6,000 in medical bills.

And now his family has filed suit.

And now student freedom-of-speech advocates have gotten involved.

On the one hand, it’s horrifying that someone with no history of violence or instability can be involuntarily committed to a psychiatric hospital on the basis of a creative story. It’s also important to note that this kind of writing is everywhere. Johnny the Homicidal Maniac was my drug of choice when I was his age; South Park is my brother’s. It may well desensitize kids–not to actual violence, but to descriptions of it that other people might interpret as serious threats. It is indeed an “overreach,” as Eric Hudson of the First Amendment Center put it. On the other hand, I think it’s in a different class from other incidents he describes:

Hudson’s report points to cases in Texas where a middle school student was held in juvenile detention for six days in 1999 for a Halloween essay for which he received an “A”; in Kansas, where an honors student was expelled in 2000 for her poem “Who Killed My Dog?” about seeking revenge against someone who killed her dog; and in Louisiana, where a student was punished in 2001 for a two-year-old drawing he created at home that pictured his school under attack.

This was not part of an assignment related to horror writing or Halloween. It was not an old piece of writing. It wasn’t directed at someone outside the school or someone who had done something truly hurtful. Riehm wrote an essay about inflicting violence on his teacher. He turned it in to his teacher after fighting with his teacher. If I were Mrs. Merson, I might be offended by the cheerful obscenity of his earlier essays, and I might speak to him about it. I’d probably be worried if he seemed shocked and outraged by a teacher not wanting to see anal rape in an essay turned in for credit. I’d almost certainly be scared if he subsequently turned in a story about…killing me, basically. Besides that, I’d want to err on the side of caution if a student wrote about shooting himself. And I would probably tell someone.

I think there may be a disconnect between the teacher’s feeling “threatened and violated,” as she puts it, and the understanding on the part of the authorities that they had another Dylan Klebold on their hands. It doesn’t sound like Riehm wants to attack the world; it sounds like he has a very specific grudge against “that bitch.”

Edited to Add:

Okay, this is what I was trying to say in so many words: If I were a teacher faced with a student who felt perfectly justified in calling me a cunt to my face in a story where he describes killing me in the most thinly-veiled of terms, I wouldn’t like Eric Hudson calling me a fascist for reporting that student. I don’t know how involved Merson was in the the actions taken by the authorities–I suspect she had no idea he’d be committed. I don’t think she was at all unreasonable to seek help, or to interpret Riehm’s misogynistic insults as hateful.


17 thoughts on Overkill

  1. A psychiatrist is required to hospitalize anyone who admits to a desire to kill himself or others and to warn anyone that the patient threatens. One could argue that in this case the patient did not exactly threaten to kill himself or his teacher, but I think that caution is justified. There’s a reasonable chance that he’s just a spoiled rich boy who likes to think he’s edgy and artistic by using taboo situations, but someone who is talking about killing a specific person–two specific people, one of them himself–needs to be at least evaluated as to whether they are a danger to themselves or others.

  2. On thinking about this, I find it strange that the teacher was concerned about the potty language and sex in the first story and not the violence. This kid was already talking about people getting run over in the original essay. That would have gotten my attention far more than the sex element.

  3. The first story seemed a little surreal, at least as the violence went — after all, it was the protagonist who had all the violence done to him. In later stories, the protagonist became the agent of violence against others, most specifically the teacher.

    Also, I don’t know that he could be that rich if he’s living on an Indian reservation.

  4. Actually, I find I empathize with the student here. There has been a real chilling effect on what topics are considered “acceptable”, which nothing to do with the quality or skill of the writing involved.

    There is a great deal of excellent writing out there that is violent and obscene, but in no way does the author intend to commit these acts.

    I think one of the most telling comments is that the teachers critique begins with “I am offended” and goes on to say that he should find another teacher. If, as reported, the piece was a satire, then it seems to me like he did a fine job. Having read the short story in question, while a little stilted in places, it’s a fairly decently written piece that many “established” authors could learn from. It is not overly violent, and I don’t think the topic matter is unacceptable for a 17 year old.

    Perhaps he did go a bit too far with his other pieces, but he was also engaging in a time-honored act of skewering your oponent with words.

    That he was taken to a mental institution is ridiculous. That his parents were sent a bill for it is outrageous. And personally, I’m glad to hear they are suing.

  5. needs to be at least evaluated as to whether they are a danger to themselves or others.

    That doesn’t take 72 hours!

  6. The first story seemed a little surreal, at least as the violence went — after all, it was the protagonist who had all the violence done to him. In later stories, the protagonist became the agent of violence against others, most specifically the teacher.

    And I think the teacher’s reaction shifted from offended to scared when the stories shifted from gross to poentially threatening. Although I wonder if this was the first story he turned in, as the article says, since she complains about an “obsessive focus” on obscenity and violence.

  7. I generally think it’s ridiculous that creative writing vith violent content should be interpreted as a sign of danger, however in this particular case it does sound like specific threats of violence against a specific woman, and that is what makes this different from an abstract ” violent and obscene” story. He was obviously bullying and victimising her, thinking that the cover of “fiction” meant he could get away with it, and that is unacceptable. Not sure psychiatric treatment was the appropriate response though, unless there were other factors involved.

  8. If I was that teacher I’d react in the same way. Oh he was just being creative threatening to kill his teacher. Bullshit. I wonder if it would have been the same if he had a male teacher.

  9. That doesn’t take 72 hours!

    It doesn’t? What do you think they do, run a violentase level and discharge the patient if it’s low? To know if someone is likely to be violent you have to talk to them over time and get to know them a little.

    All in all, I think it is quite likely that this kid went in for the sex and violence because he knew that it got a rise out of his teacher and he was going for the reaction. He just maybe got a little more reaction than he meant to. But I’d want to make sure of that if I were an authority figure around him (teacher, parent, principal). Better to make an unnecessary fuss than to have a Columbine incident or a more mundane suicide.

  10. I’ve read a few articles about this story, but none have mentioned something that happened a few years ago in my hometown (Bethlehem, PA).

    In short, a middle school student made a website threatening to kill his math teacher (Mrs. Fulmer! My 7th grade math teacher! She was a tough teacher, but jeez). Not only that, but the website solicited donations to hire a hitman.

    He got expelled, and his parents sued. (I know his parents, and in my opinion they are horrid people, so it makes sense.)

    Here is an article about the whole thing from the NEA website.

    Go here for more related articles. (Google search for “Justin Swidler” “Kathleen Fulmer”)

  11. There may be a couple of things going on within this young man’s mind. One is that he has been threatened by the teacher’s negative comments for expressing how his world works for him. Some of us live in surreal and violent worlds that others do not appreciate or can hardly envision. Writing about what you see for an unsympathetic and even threatening other is in itself an act of defiance and self-protection for some folk with one of the most potent forms of expression we have, the written word. Kudos for wit. I wonder if he could evoke admiration or sorrow as easily as fear. Has the teacher tried this or is she unable to attend properly to one among many? (or not care unless something becomes personal.)
    The other point is that if he views the world as this threatening, there is a problem that needs to be addressed, whether it resides within the young man, the teacher, or both. The danger is in pushing him too much in one way or the other, making him tilt either toward immediate violence or to martyrdom, both with inherent danger to a developing psyche. If he is a good writer, maybe the key is to explore these visions further and encourage him to investigate other avenues in writing say along the lines of Dostoevsky, Cormac McCarthy, or (dare I say) Stephen King.

  12. I think its hard to know what the kid was doing this for as we don’t know the dynamics of the kid’s homelife, nor the dynamics of the teacher relationship in full context.

    I would venture to guess that the kid was looking for attention through reaction from the teacher. The teacher’s cold and distant response probably enraged him to the point where 1) more obscene and gross stories had to be written to solicit a more feeling response or whatever response he wanted 2) he began to express rage at the focus of his attention who wasn’t sufficiently feeding his need or desire. Typical stuff from a teenager starving for attention.

    Giving the kid a little time to talk one on one to the teacher may have given some insight and maybe have helped the kid release his tension or dispell his fantasies before they got out of control.

    I dunno.

    As for censoring a kid’s writing, hell if someone was writing something about me, sending it to me and it contained content that indicated at least some desire to do something terrible to me, guess I’d be a little freaked out too. If it kept getting worse, think I’d go get some help — quick.

    The kid got some attention. Just not the kind he wanted.

    The town police/authorities over-reacted by cuffing the kid and forcing confinement, family intervention sure, but forced confinement, methinks they got a little columbinese.

  13. If he is a good writer, maybe the key is to explore these visions further and encourage him to investigate other avenues in writing say along the lines of Dostoevsky, Cormac McCarthy, or (dare I say) Stephen King.

    Sounds like a good idea to me. But one element of good writing that a teenager usually lacks is control. If he is ever going to be successful he needs to learn to deal with limits and criticism. If he gets a rejection letter from a publisher and sends them another story that is a thinly disguised death threat it is, shall we say, unlikely to enhance his career. If I were trying to encourage this young man to write I’d suggest that he think of barriers like “no obscenity, no sex” as challenges. For example, could he have gotten the point he wanted to make in the original story (whatever that was) acrossed without using overt obscenity or sexual imagry? Oh, well, it’s easy enough to criticize someone else’s teaching after the fact.

  14. I agree with your last post Dianne. Students like this need to understand limitations but where do they go to find help in such matters? Mentors? Parents? Peers? Blogs like this? Living in Minnesota (as I do) I’m afraid the limits of social interaction with outside mainstream views are nil, especially if there is a racial and sexual divide between the protagonists. I am afraid we may be witness to another soul lost in the hegemony of the education system that values compliance and homogenization over individual talent and worth. I would like to see a venue for people like this student where they could explore their art (and feelings) such as The Loft in Minneapolis but without the concordant pressure of money and success. Alas, there are few places even close to such models and still fewer people who care. The risk is too great in personal and financial matters as the teacher and authorities reactions suggest. If anyone knows of such a program, please let me know. (Tribal Councils, Community Centers?)

  15. Look, I’m the first one to defend free speech, but some speech is a threat. I mean, anything squeaks in if we allow “creativity” as a defense against a charge of delivering threats. Yeah, I stalked you for days, left you messages telling you I was going to rape and murder you in your car, your mailbox, your place of work. Sure, I left some dead animals on your front porch with your name shaved into the fur.

    Hey, I was just being creative!

    I think we need a little less sympathy for this oh-so-creative kid who committed an act of written assault and a little more concern for the safety of teachers. I did plenty of creative writing in high school – won awards and went to state – and I never had to level transparent, obscene threats against anybody. It’s not stunting anybody’s creativity for this kid to learn that threats of violence – which are themselves violence – carry consequences. Being creative means learning to deal with the responsibility of that creativity.

  16. Good point Chet, but what happens now we agree there may be a problem, send him to Red Wing Reformatory? Maybe ROTC or like what happened in some cases during the Viet Nam war, presigned enlistment papers to use his precieved violent tendency to an (arguably questionable) noble service to his country and along the way learn some discipline? Some young men have used the millitary to an advantage in situations such as this. A follow-up to this fellow’s situation could provide a lot of insight into how to deal with this. A civillian job could work just as well and he is close to being on his own so decisions for this man’s future are critical in the sense of “now”. I would like to know what kind of support and resources are available to guide this kid (and future others) today before something might get out of hand. Bad feelings can last a lifetime and damage relationships to more people than just one kid. Think of the teacher and her family, the administration who has to deal with this, the police, social workers and doctors, not to mention the young nan’s family, and even the pupil/teacher relationships existing within the school itself. What if more marginal students loose their trust in their teachers and educators become suspicious of student behavior? These are often delicate situations that can have repurcussions beyond the headlines. I don’t believe you need a ten pound sledge for a ten penny nail, but I do admit it feels good to pound something once in a while. However, cleanup is a bit messier than doing it right the first time around.

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